Wednesday, 27 April 2011

First draft

 Here is a first draft (without the very end..) of what I intend to be a picture book. I need to break up the text into something like 22 pages and see if the words on each page are strong enough to be backed up by a picture. If not....to the drawing board!

Please take the time to read it. Thanks!


Taller than Smaller




Bop Tobble was sad.
so sad, that he wasn't not sad.
He felt that everything was looking down at him.
Then he said to no-one there
"why am I not taller than I am smaller?"


He asked the GIANT sunflower in the very BIG garden


"why am I not taller than I am smaller?"


But the sunflower said nothing, so he thought that it was because
he was so far down to the ground that it probably thought his voice
was just a tiny ant snoring.


Next, he asked the Great, great, great Grandfather's clock


"why am I not taller than I am smaller?"


But the Great, great, great Grandfather's clock was rather deaf
and just chimed and said " Half-past Tuesday, and apple pudding for seconds"


He asked the lion at the zoo,


"why am I not taller than I am smaller?"


The lion roared a funny roar that sounded like it said " I like you being smaller because
that means that I am taller"


Bop Tobble thought a thought that made him think, " I will make myself taller than I am smaller!"


So he borrowed some stilts from his good friend Dumpty Humpty, who was busy testing a trampoline at the bottom of his wall.


After some wibbly-wobbly walking, Bop was walking tall! With just fifteen giant steps he walked to the Everything shop and said, " At last I will see to the very tallest top shelf and see all of the interesting things that my smaller cannot!"
On his way, he imagined what would be on the top shelf. " Perhaps some yellow oranges that turn blue when they are sad? Or armbands for golfish that can't swim? 


He took a taller step into the shop and the top shelf was up to his nose.He could see a sign on the top shelf that said ' Boring Things'. " Boring things?" he thought. " What a boring thing to put in such an interesting place like the top shelf!" Then he began to explore the top shelf.


He then saw a sign that said "things that are boring to children". "Oh dear" he thought.
The next thing he saw was a book about bricks.
 Then there was a tin that read 'boring brown paint'.
 Then there was something that looked like a robot's dinner.But he had never seen any robots in Puggy town.
 Next was a small bag of useless glue.


Oh dear.The shelf was indeed full of boring things.


 Bop Tobble was sad.
So sad that he wasn't not sad.
He was sad that being taller wasn't really better than being smaller after all.
As he looked at  a pair of grey gloves, he began to yawn. he was so bored!
"Z-z-z-z-z-z.." Bop Tobble had fallen asleep. He was so asleep that he fell over and landed on
a really soft beach ball and bounced until he landed in a toy car. He woke up, now staring at the bottom shelf. The bottom shelf was was full of not boring toys!Lots of colours danced for his eyes. yellows, greens, sparkling------- a toy cat that never ran off, a square ball that never rolled away, a skateboard that was allowed
Bop Tobble then thought a thought that made him think
" Being taller is not better than being smaller"
He couldn't imagine himself being taller and having to bend all of the way down to the bottom shelf to see all of the exciting toys on the bottom shelf....









1 comment:

  1. Hi Joe! That's a great story :) Did you end up doing any more work to it? Great moral to the story *grin*

    I dropped by because I found you on Twitter. We have started a not-for-profit group called Hands That Do and were hoping if you are not using your Twitter username that you might let us aquire it instead?

    If you could drop me an email to me(at)qodo.org that would be awesome. Even if it's just to say no if you're not interested.

    Many thanks!
    Rose

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